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the thing is

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the thing is
that when the music
beats at my temples,
when these voices
surge and crash over my head,
i lose myself in the tide;

the thing is
i have been adrift
without a compass,
sans dictionary for
the language of wind or stars;

the thing is
i have been building a shelter
out of my own life-raft
and dressing the gaps
with pieces of my soul.

the thing is—
i have been teetering and now
all of my walls
are coming
down.
Right, then. Had a break in literary productivity and of course I had to go and end it with angst. As usual.

Does the metaphor work? What of my choice in punctuation? Line breaks (especially in the last stanza)? Does the repetition become tedious? Come at me.
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skiesofchaos's avatar
It does to me at the least bring emotion. :) And a rather odd thought out of the blue. What would be the equivalent for duct tape for mending and patching up emotions and the soul?